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mamagotcha) wrote2011-08-29 05:01 pm
mamagotcha) wrote2011-08-29 05:01 pm
New website
So some of you know I have done some work with perinatal hospice, as well as one-on-one doula support for families facing miscarriage or the loss of a child.
I've been toying with the idea of trying to get something started while I'm here in Chicago, and this website is what I've come up with.
If you have the time or inclination to do so, would you take a look at it and let me know what you think?
(If I could, I would add another page full of pregnancy loss-related websites and books, but I've already used up all the pages I've been allotted. I still might try to shoehorn those in... maybe consolidate two of the other pages?)
I am also willing to accompany and support women through abortions, although that's not what I want the site to be about. Do you think I should include that specifically on this site, or would it alienate other potential clients?
Thank you!
ETA: I've incorporated most of what M and J suggested below, but I'd still love more feedback if anyone wants to throw it my way!
I know the text on the "Contact Me" window is smaller than the text on the other windows, but I can't figure out (yet) how to change it... and I'm a bit mystified that it's different from the other pages. Anyway, I've noticed it and I'm working on it.
I've been toying with the idea of trying to get something started while I'm here in Chicago, and this website is what I've come up with.
If you have the time or inclination to do so, would you take a look at it and let me know what you think?
(If I could, I would add another page full of pregnancy loss-related websites and books, but I've already used up all the pages I've been allotted. I still might try to shoehorn those in... maybe consolidate two of the other pages?)
I am also willing to accompany and support women through abortions, although that's not what I want the site to be about. Do you think I should include that specifically on this site, or would it alienate other potential clients?
Thank you!
ETA: I've incorporated most of what M and J suggested below, but I'd still love more feedback if anyone wants to throw it my way!
I know the text on the "Contact Me" window is smaller than the text on the other windows, but I can't figure out (yet) how to change it... and I'm a bit mystified that it's different from the other pages. Anyway, I've noticed it and I'm working on it.
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"I can help parents tap into our inner wisdom" looks like it should be "their inner wisdom".
"explore ways to find new pathways to through fear or grief"--there's an extra "to" that shouldn't be there.
And some style/flow suggestions you can take or leave as you see fit:
Just from an aesthetic viewpoint, I'd prefer a little more white space under the main title. Maybe just a line break above the body text.
The second sentence of the first bullet point under "What I do" (the one starting "Support is...") is a bit run-on and required two readings for me to parse it correctly.
"Your baby is so important to you"--I'd remove "so," or change it to a different intensifier. A "so" leads me to expect a "that".
"I can attend to her and her family if she desires that type of support"--there's already an "if" earlier in this sentence; I think the bit after the word "family" is implied and can be omitted.
"through fear or grief towards healing and peace"--I know "towards" rather than "toward" is considered acceptable by some people, but it's still jarring to me to see it in writing.
"help you get what you need to care for, birth and celebrate your child"--I'd prefer an Oxford comma here.
"I also was privileged to serve several families"--I'd leave out "also," but if it needs to be there, I'd phrase it "I was also".
"every one of those special babies touched their families, and me, so deeply"--again, "so" leads me to expect "that".
"I've been continuing to educate myself"--maybe "I've continued to educate myself" instead?
"I feel so blessed and honored"--again, the "so" (here I think it can be left out, as M suggested).
I think the last paragraph of the "About me" section should be moved to the beginning.
If you're looking to add a page of links and recommendations, perhaps you could move the information about cost to either the intro section or the "What I do" section.
If your goal is to get a support network going in your area, maybe it would be a good idea to change the "Looking for support?" section title to something more along the lines of "Contact me" and include an invitation for other support providers to contact you as well as people seeking support.
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